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    i was running from
    the sea. now, i want it to
    crash all over me

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:icondragon-fly-to-me:
*dragon-fly-to-me Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hello. :) I just wanted to let you know I have featured this lovely poem in my journal. [link]
Have a nice week!!
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:iconhazeltown:
*hazeltown Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, love
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:icondragon-fly-to-me:
*dragon-fly-to-me Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome.
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:iconenerqy:
*Enerqy Jan 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Please resubmit to poetry!
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:iconfelka-wolf:
~Felka-wolf Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful
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:iconyuen1:
Mood: Questionable ~Yuen1 Jan 14, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I don't know, I'm no poetry nut or anything, but it seems like you just made a poetic statement and then broke it up to make it into a Haiku. Just seems fractured, like you ran out of space so you started a new line, Shouldn't it be with every new line, you say something different? Not finishing a bit of the sentence you didn't have room for?

Like I said, I don't really know about poetry or anything, just what I think. The actual content is nice.
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:iconhazeltown:
*hazeltown Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I write free verse poetry, so this was barely anything new to what I usually do. I hardly ever keep structure. If anything, I added my own flare to a fixed verse. Thank you.
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:iconyuen1:
Mood: Questionable ~Yuen1 Jan 14, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Alright, just said my opinion on it, feel free to write however you want.
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:iconsaladchan:
It's not often that a haiku makes the front page. Lovely work, by the way.
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:iconannanonyma:
I have to admit that I am not a real fan of haikus (because most writers have difficulties putting some meaning into those few syllables) but this one caught my eye. Nise contrast.
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