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    why don't you spin around, little tree-heart

    smile at the stars & scamper to northern grounds

    love yourself like lamp lights licking lonesome

    blades of grass creating fiery fields



    i can hear your voice i can hear your voice i can hear

    you now, i can hear you now, they're all gone
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~Adagiobunny Feb 9, 2013  Student Writer
something reaching & something leaving - something left behind. beautiful progression & longing.
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:iconarchelyxs:
Very powerful surge of energy waiting between the lines of that last couplet.
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~Allurite Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I will have to agree with everyone else about that last stanza, but I also liked the third line, with all the alliteration.
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`tiganusi Jan 24, 2013  Professional
that last stanza gave me the feels.
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~winterkate Jan 23, 2013  Student Writer
This was amazing. It's going to take me many reads to fully understand it, I think, but you just have such a way with rhythm and description - it's lovely.
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*0hgravity Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh god. I love the rhythm in the last stanza.
reminded me of a song.
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!englandrain Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your poems are always a delight.
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*CherishKay Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree! :thumbsup:
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